Talk:Adil/@comment-25526836-20150515223856




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So, this is your first character on the wiki, and I felt like that I should always start with the ones that either came first or received the most development. I think that Adil and Hail are the more developed ones so ones for Alto, Ace and Anna will come later on.

Let's start with design. Like most of your other arts as of recently, it's really good. It doesn't seem to capture her personality too well but it matches up with her...what can I say? Well, external look?? Like, if you look at Adil from afar the design seems to match their "false alarm intimidation" personality, like what you see at first glance. I'm horrible at describing lol



Let's dive into relationships, shall we? Hail may only have two relationships overall (between Hail and Lance) but they're very truthful and stick to their words which is always something important. On Hail's part, it's serious and shows their "best friend" status decently. On Lance's part, it's downright hilarious and brings out Adil's awkward side. So you did well here, too.



Information is pretty much what characters consist of, like their elements and details that don't fit in with everything else.

Adil is a strange, awkward sand based user who can't control their abilities real well and needs supervision from someone else. I really like that about them. But the lack of an "intro paragraph" is sort of...disappointing as it doesn't sum up things about the character that can grab the reader's attention right away. I mean the summary of the character is pretty much broken down into the article's pieces, some of it's not there at the beginning for the reader to notice. Like, "Adil is a sand elemental Halcandran" and beyond that point for a summary would be good.

So, in the meantime...



As Adil has no backstory or revealed ability descriptions, I'm skipping those, sorry.

Personality. I personally think that the personality is well done, it illustrates Adil very well and gives them a very realistic approach, which is something I really like about characters. There aren't any flaws here as far as I can see, well done.



Overall Adil is an interesting character with a fairly decent set up for a page. I'm in love with the character overall (not obsessively lol) and you put some effort into it. It's not a complete article but from what I got it's great. If you can fill in the abilities section later on that would be cool, and perhaps a very small backstory would be great to help finish up the article a bit? I don't know that's just me.