Talk:Kirsti/@comment-31587332-20150712112212

Review of Kirsti: Sticker from Space

''Kirsti is a Popopo who came to Zolara from Earth. She claims to be from Sacramento, California, but is actually from a planet called Rainboweria.'' Opening paragraph, wahey. This kinda conflicts with a later piece of information, where it states that she lived on Earth for 16 years. In order to become a citizen of a country through naturalisation, you have to be 18 years or older, which she is. It's also required that you have had 5 years of reckonable residence within the last 9 years. It's safe to assume that she hasn't been arrested or anything. Basically, she's an American citizen as of now, which makes her a citizen of Earth. Therefore, it's not a claim. She really is from California.

Element - Water, Telekinesis, Psychic (normal form)/All (goddess form) Okay it seems like all your characters have 3 elements. Not necessarily a bad thing - there are other tri elementals - but- ... ...'ALL ELEMENTS!? GODDESS FORM!? WHAT THE FLIP FLAPPITY FUCK!?'

Kirsti has long blonde hair, a grey body, black feet, brown cheeks and light blue eyes. Alright, this is fine. Stands out from others, but not in a bad way.

''Kirsti has water, telekinetic and psychic powers. She can transform into a goddess of sorts. This form gives her access to all elements.'' All your stuff is ridiculously short. Most articles tend to at least mention how they use those powers. This paragraph is literally a slightly expanded version of the elements section of the infobox. Also what the fuck, goddess form!? DO YOU REALISE HOW FUCKING OP THAT IS!? HOW DID SHE EVEN GET IT!? WHY DOES SHE HAVE IT!? IF NEED BE, I WILL HAVE ANOTHER DEBATE ALA THE KRYSTAL ONE.

Let's break this next part down bit by bit: ''Kirsti's early life wasn't exactly on Earth. She spent her first 7 years on a very distant planet by the name of Rainboweria.'' It wasn't exactly on Earth. Y'know, it was on another fucking planet. Gosh, don't you hate when that happens? Am I right ladies? The "exactly" really isn't needed. Like at all. Also two spaces between "by" and "the" HA.

She didn't know this until very recently. I have so many problems with this sole sentence. How can she not know? Because 7 is babby age? I think I'd remember being on a different planet even if I was 3. How would she not remember her parents sending her to Earth? That'd be fucking traumatizing. You took a potentially traumatic event that could be a burden she has to carry for the rest of her life and fucking skimmed over it. What the fuck dude? Let's pretend for a second that somehow it makes sense for her to have forgotten. How the fuck could she find out? On her way out of school, a stranger slips her a note reading "You're from Rainboweria". ??????? Nobody in their right mind would believe that. Especially seeing as it'd have to be VErY distant, as a planet with a habitable climate would have to be in another galaxy and that'd be lightyears away. Don't get me started on space. At all. It's for your own health and safety.

She was sent to Earth alongside her then barely-born sister Alisha. How can you be barely born? Also we all seem to be avoiding the million dollar question here. Why the fuck did their parents disown them and send them to another galaxy!? Were they horrible parents? Did Kirsti and Alisha run away? Did they shoot them into the cosmos for the hell of it? Was there some deadly disease? Were they supposed to murder the residents of Earth? Were they meant to scout for habitable planets? Were they sent to conquer other planets? Also, they expected a 7 year old to care for a newborn!? Like what the fuck? Furthermore, what kind of planet is Rainboweria? It would have to be much more advanced than Earth, seeing as they have the resources and knowledge to send two kids into space with enough food to last them the journey. Knowing kids, they would likely eat their supply much quicker than necessary, that would likely be taken into account. So what's the obvious solution? Faster travel. They have the technology to traverse lightyears in maybe weeks? I'll continue this rant later bc this is a review. But still, some seriously missed potential.

''16 years passed, and they still had no idea what had become of their parents. They were lost in a world they barely knew out of the town they'd touched down in.'' This seriously conflicts with what is stated earlier in the paragraph. They managed to find out about Rainboweria somehow, so why not their parents? And how do they only know about their town? Ever heard of a library? Or school? Or internet? Actually scratch that. They're legally obliged to go to school. Also I wanna know more about their life on Earth. Were they taken in to an orphanage? How did they get money? TELL ME MORE. Again, missed potential.

''Kirsti found Zolara by accident, finding a portal in her basement that lead to Sky City. She felt more at home almost instantly, but she knew she'd always be an alien.'' ????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? She literally is an alien, both on Zolara and Earth????????????????? ''Kirsti is very calm and seems to have a sixth sense when it comes to looking out for other people. She is very nurturing.'' Does RTA know what generuc means? Can we teach him what generic means?

''Kirsti is in a relationship with Eddie. Alisha is Kirsti's sister.'' Refer above.

Now can I just rant about Rainboweria? Continuing from my above rant, what's Rainboweria like? They're obviously extremely advanced. They knew about Earth, were willing to send two kids into space for the hell of it and were actually able to do it. That's pretty damn advanced to me. And what kind of name is that? Rainboweria? The fuck?

You just got fucking schooled by somebody 3 years younger than you B)